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As Tears Go By
Domino

domino (at)Domin-o (dot) org (dot) uk


Category: Parody Tribute

As Tears Go By

It is the evening of the day,
It's time for naughty boys to pay
Woeful brother they can see
Going over mommy's knee,
My sisters watch as tears go by.

Oh Mommy's paddle sure does sting
It makes all naughty children sing.
All they hear are the sounds
Of yells, as swats on bum rebound
My sisters watch as tears go by.

It is the evening of the day,
Sore-bottomed, I'm sent on my way
Up to bed to wait in fear
For Dad to come and do his share
My sisters watch as tears go by.

Ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,
ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,
ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,
ow,ow, ow......

Readers Comments:
Mary:  gemcollector2001 (at) yahoo (dot) com

This was a very cute parady I hadn't heard the song before but I looked it up and listened to the original I liked how the author used lines from the original song to help tie them both together.

I wasn't sure where the need for the many "ow's" fit in at the very end however. I think one elongated owwwww would have fit better with the end of the song if the authors intent was to match the hmmhmm in the original song.
Alex:  alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk

LOL I was closing my eyes and silently doing Marianne Faithfull impressions to this...couldn't quite fit the 'ow,ow, ow' bits in though. Yes, it's mildly amusing without taking the roof off the stand and, like I said on a previous review, I find it difficult to score these as I would a story but I'll do my best.
Hal:   janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com

Nice little story but it just did not do anything for me.  I am just a standard issue SSC reader.  I have no great skill in the art of Poetry.  So, I don't know if this was correctly constructed or not.  I don't know if the repeated last line was a Poetry requirement or something that the writer just wanted to do.

He must have at least two sisters, and they got to sit and watch him get his spanking.  So there was humiliation added to the spanking.  Always an interesting twist.  Does he get to watch when one or more of his sisters gets their panties pulled down and their bottom turned red?  I just did not get much of a word picture from this story.  Yes, I do hope to read more by this writer.

Finally was the unending line of "ow" part of the Poetry or is this a two part story.  Part one being Poetry and Part two being plain text?  I just don't know

Winks:  irishwinks (at) bresnan (dot) net

I liked this a lot.  I couldn't quite remember the tune and looked it up on youtube.  The words fit nicely and flowed smoothly.  Most song parodies are written to a quick beat.  This one used a slower tempo and sad song as the base, and it worked very well.  From a child's POV, it would be an unhappy moment, and the slow-motion feel of it gave it a surreal quality.