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| As Tears Go By Domino domino (at)Domin-o (dot) org (dot) uk Category: Parody Tribute As Tears Go By
It is the evening of the day, It's time for naughty boys to pay Woeful brother they can see Going over mommy's knee, My sisters watch as tears go by. Oh Mommy's paddle sure does sting It makes all naughty children sing. All they hear are the sounds Of yells, as swats on bum rebound My sisters watch as tears go by. It is the evening of the day, Sore-bottomed, I'm sent on my way Up to bed to wait in fear For Dad to come and do his share My sisters watch as tears go by. Ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow, ow,ow, ow...... |
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| Mary:
gemcollector2001 (at) yahoo (dot) com This was a very cute parady I hadn't heard the song before but I looked it up and listened to the original I liked how the author used lines from the original song to help tie them both together. I wasn't sure where the need for the many "ow's" fit in at the very end however. I think one elongated owwwww would have fit better with the end of the song if the authors intent was to match the hmmhmm in the original song. |
| Alex:
alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk LOL I was closing my eyes and silently doing Marianne Faithfull impressions to this...couldn't quite fit the 'ow,ow, ow' bits in though. Yes, it's mildly amusing without taking the roof off the stand and, like I said on a previous review, I find it difficult to score these as I would a story but I'll do my best. |
| Hal:
janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com Nice little story but it just did not do anything for me. I am just a standard issue SSC reader. I have no great skill in the art of Poetry. So, I don't know if this was correctly constructed or not. I don't know if the repeated last line was a Poetry requirement or something that the writer just wanted to do. He must have at least two sisters, and they got to sit and watch him get his spanking. So there was humiliation added to the spanking. Always an interesting twist. Does he get to watch when one or more of his sisters gets their panties pulled down and their bottom turned red? I just did not get much of a word picture from this story. Yes, I do hope to read more by this writer. Finally was the unending line of "ow" part of the Poetry or is this a two part story. Part one being Poetry and Part two being plain text? I just don't know |
| Winks:
irishwinks (at) bresnan (dot) net I liked this a lot. I
couldn't quite remember the tune and looked it up on youtube. The
words fit nicely and flowed smoothly. Most song parodies are
written to a quick beat. This one used a slower tempo and sad
song as the base, and it worked very well. From a child's POV, it
would be an unhappy moment, and the slow-motion feel of it gave it a
surreal quality. |